Still Mourning

I’m delighted to get the perfect poet award yet again.Special thanks go to  Jingle for hosting and managing the poets’ rally and  to all the participants in this rally.

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Mere words can’t convey

my grief after you died .

words of solace can’t take away

the pain I feel  inside.

words  of comfort can’t wash  away

The tears I have   cried .

The echo of your voice

Still resounds in my ears.

Your shadow in the playground

Still runs and plays with peers.

Your sweet smell in the house

Still lingers all these years.

Whenever  I see your photo on the wall

Flood of tears submerge my eyes.

Whenever I see your little sister

my worst fears  suddenly arise .

whenever I see your father

a piece of me withers and dies.

I’d like to nominate a prolific poet with an immense talent : William


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34 Responses

  1. that was touching n moved me…

    glad to visit ur blog….Keep writing!

    I wld like to ‘invite’ u to visit my blog at:

    http://www.versepoems.com

    ur comment wld be invaluable.Tx.

  2. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/05/15/poetry-award-for-week-18-thursday-poets-rally/

    Three awards for poetry,
    the most honest poet award,
    the most open minded poet award,
    the most intelligent poet award,

    two general awards,
    the big heart award,
    you are the princess snow-white award.

    Hope that you enjoy these 5 award.
    Happy Weekend!
    Smiles!

  3. Sad, emotional, honest…you touch the soul with this one.

  4. Happy Friday!
    Best wishes…..

    You are one kind man,
    enjoy your quality and have fun yourself!

  5. A really wonderful tribute to a lost loved one.

  6. hope you will soon be free and i will get my daily poems again.

  7. Beautiful poem and tribute. Thanks

  8. An additional comment. Wouublished book ld love to pick your brain a bit on styles. If your interested I will e-mail you a copy of my published book, to get your opinion. Free of charge. My e-mail is tlundmark@missionsinc.org

  9. I loved it. Your stuff is great, very moving. I felt your emotions. I was happy to get such a positive comment from someone of your talent. Thank you

  10. What a sad poem. Good job though. Its very well written. 🙂

  11. Well done, words of loss, we all know them well, though only a select few of the population can convey their emotions comfortably, well done.

  12. dear rahim,
    this was soul stirring, painful and beautiful.
    nothing comes close to losing a child. nothing.

  13. vivid image of a death of a loved ones,
    your words count,
    the rhyme on time,
    beautifully crafted poem,
    strong emotions pop out of your lines like shooting stars.
    cheers!
    Hope that you have fun visiting some fresh poets!

  14. another great poem from a great poet.. a heartfelt poem..really good.. death is really something you can just accept and move on.. no words can describe how great this poem is..really lovely! thank you for sharing it 🙂

  15. Powerful and honest.
    We should all share like you did in this poem

  16. what beautiful sorrow…nicely done…its never easy…

  17. “Beautifully Done Rahim”!!!! Love lost by death is hard,but thank God he does bring us through!!!
    😀 😀

  18. Beautiful and yet chillingly mysterious; but a mystery one hesitates to know. Nicely done!
    http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

  19. You are very talented in your word selection, Rahim
    Beautiful,sad poem, sensitively written!
    Marinela x

  20. very touching write.. I can connect with your write…
    so well expressed,,, heartfelt verses…

  21. awe friend this was very sad, tragic, beautifully written.
    THANK YOU friend for nominating me, you are very kind, I found a very good friend in you and I am delighted 🙂

  22. I have not lost a child, but a brother and a sister when we were children, and their photos still send me crying too.

    I hope you will find soem peace in friendship today.

  23. This is touching Wordy, This is really touching. Another Parent feeling another Parent’s loose of a child. Impressive write up.

  24. Amazing as ever!

  25. Beautiful,sad poem, with a nice flow.

  26. missar,

    the loneliness of losing someone you love is great. it seems that a part of you was lost and will not come back by your side anymore. if i might add, this is a strong poem when you relate it with war. war is unfair, so many innocent lives were lost.

    this poem transcends all understanding, race or color, when it comes to pain of losing life.

    marvin

  27. My dear Rahim,

    You are such a creative writer so I am TAGGING YOU.. please go to Wordy Wednesday @Tara Miller Writes to write the next 1-3 lines to a story yet told! Once you have done that, please TAG others too. Take care of you! hugs shakira

  28. A marvellous emotional tribute. Beautifully done.

  29. The lost of life and especially a child brings such saddness into the heart…your poem captures part of those emotions and how they impact family and friends…well said.

  30. what a magnificent piece, Rahim.
    Is everything ok with you?
    Mine is here
    Happy Sensational Wednesday!
    hugs
    shakira

  31. awesome poem,
    great nomination!
    I am sure William is tickled!
    thanks for the perfect post!
    🙂

  32. WOW! I could feel the emotions written into this poem. It made me cry with you, now that is an excelent poem when it can make anyone feel this way. Awesome write my friend.

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