My Prison

I wanna break

The somber  shackles

Of my seclusion .

I wanna  shatter

The bitter  chains

Of my delusion.

I wanna smash

The iron gate

Of my prison.

I wanna  thrust

The shame inside

Into the limbo

Of the forgotten.

I wanna throw

My  mind-pain

Into  the deep recess

Of  oblivion.

I wanna translate

My inner struggle

into the language

of the unspoken.

I wanna  spell

My guilty past

In the book

Of confession .

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35 Responses

  1. This is really good! The translation of pain through poetry is very healing. ‘I wanna translate my inner struggle into the language of the unspoken’ – great lines! thanks for sharing, nice site!
    Lynda from ‘echostains’ and also ‘bookstains’

  2. I agree with everyone here. Powerful and very well written!

  3. Brilliant poem, sad but very powerful.

  4. “I wanna translate

    My inner struggle

    into the language

    of the unspoken.”
    — beautiful indeed!!!

  5. Nice poem! Thanks for sharing

  6. Emotional, powerful, and something I can relate to. Very well done!

  7. Driving words. The prison without bars.

  8. Brilliant words you are gifted ya sadeeki!
    Glad I could spread the love of LoreenaMcKennitt in here 🙂

  9. hey u rocked the show buddy…. awesome keep writing
    here you can find my post : http://vishurocks.wordpress.com/

  10. You are a very good writer! WOW! I really got involved with your words! Keep it going strong! 🙂

  11. whooaa…!!!!! that was awesome abder..
    really loved it..
    perfectly emotes the feelling of wanting to break free…
    😀

  12. a very honest piece ~ simple, but it carries so much strength nonetheless. thanks for sharing, and also thank you for the kind words on my latest poem. your words were very much appreciated : )

  13. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/03/25/thursday-is-awards-shower-day-this-week-week-11-participants/

    you use words very nicely,
    Happy Friday!

    you win the sweetest poet award,
    have fun!

  14. Great poem. Like Dustus I simply loved these lines:

    I wanna translate
    My inner struggle
    into the language
    of the unspoken.

    Brilliant.

  15. dear friend,
    this is one of the most beautiful poems i have read.
    wonderful and very intelligent.
    with lots of affection,

  16. truthful and not alone. we all have things we want to let go of. good to know there is one who gives hope,give truth,life and LOVE!

  17. Deep and powerful. Excellently done.

  18. “I wanna break

    The somber shackles

    Of my seclusion .

    I wanna shatter

    The bitter chains

    Of my delusion.

    I wanna smash

    The iron gate

    Of my prison.”

    loved these lines!!! really powerful and moving! May Allah grant u ur wishes… keep u the good work… Assalamu alaika Warahmatullahi!

  19. Amazing! ❤

  20. this is powerful! awesome job!

    ~IS

  21. Sch strng feelngs apparent in a poem, I’ve been feeling like this a while now, I can relate! Nice work, and very readable 🙂

  22. It is a beautiful lament, timeless.

  23. What a powerful poem, I pictured it being read in a dark theatre while two dancers are doing their thing in tights. I don’t know the name of the dance, the one where they’re slow and dramatic, with lifts and all that

  24. The shame inside

    Into the limbo

    Of the forgotten
    Now, those are some powerful words that I think we’ve all felt. Awesome poem.

  25. Great poem. My fav lines… “I wanna translate / My inner struggle / into the language / of the unspoken.” Wow! Thanks

  26. Wow! That is fantastic.

  27. beautiful and powerful…i would fill pages…

  28. Such a beautiful poem….so powerful….thank you for this gift of words!

  29. powerful words. thanks for sharing

  30. Nice post…Great reasoning.

  31. I enjoyed everything about this poem. The Subject for me was something I could whole-heartedly relate to. This poems stays with you long after you’ve read it I think.

  32. I’m withouth words!
    This poem is very touching!
    THank you for share it!
    I wait next one 😉

    Enjoy the moment,my friend! 🙂

  33. Oh Rahim this is a good powerful poem!!! I enjoyed it very much,do enjoy a wonderful evening.
    😀

  34. powerful and precise!
    a master piece!
    Happy Thursday!
    😉
    you are the best!

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