The last Breath

Lying still  in bed

His face emaciated  and   pallid

Sweat droplets on his forehead

His eyes weary   and flaccid.

Staring at the ceiling ,

Shivering, coughing , squealing.

Smells of sickness filled the room

Twined with a deafning stillness

Gave a sense of  impending doom

And an aura of sadness.

I held his right  hand

It was cold and damp.

he mumbled some words

which I couldn’t understand.

his lips slightly twitched

he mumbled some words again.

was it  last paryers, delirium or pain  ?

As the early morning  sun rays

Seeped through the grey  curtains;

Illuminating his cadaverous face,

He wriggled  his legs fast,

Let go of my left  hand

And breathed his last..

I pulled the blanket over his face

After I d’ given him my  last embrace.

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32 Responses

  1. it is really beautiful. It captures the image well. Sweat on the forehead of a dying person is like a sign of peace, serenity, it is said that the person is peacefully ascending to paradise.

  2. Hello, thank you for your comment on my blog! Means a lot to me… This poem of yours is very heartfelt, feels very sad.. As a person who has lost two aunts to cancer, and have watched their slow and painful deaths, I can truly relate to this one.. ! And what can I say, your awards speak for your work… 🙂

  3. this is a beautiful painful poem, well written, painted perfectly, so very sad…thank you for writing this piece it resonated with me

  4. Wow this one touch me in an unimagenative way .You are very good .It’s a privalige for me that you left a comment on my blog .But yet again this one just touched me and will touch many others i believe .Wow what can I sayt ?For once in my life a poem has left me speechless .I feel like a total amateur.Today you have left me wondering and telling everybody how much I love them .So once again …It’s just perfect .It felt as if I was there as if it was me .One last thing …..Standing ovation !!! xoxo Pikkie

  5. This is truly captivating, I like those poems , they are very intense and leave something for us to think about later.
    grats!

  6. A great poem capturing the moment perfectly!

  7. Wow I felt like I was right there in the moment, bravo!!!

  8. A brilliant poem, very honest, very true. I look forward to reading more of your work.

  9. A touching poem, indeed. Such intense use of words! I have always tried to instill such an effect in my poems, but have failed to do so because of my limited vocab. But sir, u shine in that respect. In fact, you inspire me. Thank you

  10. A touching poem, indeed. Such intense use of words! I have always tried to instill such an effect in my poems, but have failed to do so because of my limited vocab. But sir, u shine in that respect.

  11. Stark and honest and beautiful.

  12. Sincerely sad and beautiful. You’ve captivated a very real moment that is universally felt. Breathtakingly heartfelt. 🙂

  13. Lots of feeling here. It brings back personal memories.

  14. Happy Saturday from Jingle
    😉

  15. amazing poem!
    you shine!

  16. this poem is really wonderful…. very insightful…

  17. Reminds me of my grandmother’s last day. *sigh* Thank you. A beautiful poem

  18. i want to give you this very fitting award… it’s nice to be your friend… 🙂 http://ishabellemanalo.wordpress.com/2010/03/13/cross-cultures-award

  19. this is one of the best poems i have read which describes the final moments of someone dying of illness; your words not only rhyme beautifully but also convey the intensity of emotions which cannot be wholly poured into words…
    thank you for having paused to comment on my page, i am glad to have discovered you thus.

  20. Your work is getting better and better.
    I am so sorry for your loss of your uncle.

    I am humbly inviting you and your friends to join me in a new meme that I have just created called,
    W33K3ND FUNNI3S!

    Please join me at W33K3ND FUNNI3S-THE CONFUSED CHINESE

    Your friendship and participation is highly appreciated.

    hugs
    shakira

  21. A sad sad poem. Inspired by the loss of a beloved?

  22. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/03/12/thursday-poets-rally-week-9-the-perfect-poet-award/

    you win perfect poet award in week 9,

    to accept,
    display the logo,
    post a poem,
    nominate one poet from previous list,

    check out award history, probabilities of acceptance and make sure the poet likes it mostly…

  23. wow. it’s … well, im at loss for words… keep up the good work. such feelings this piece conveyed.

  24. wow,
    it is hard to suffer like that,
    it reminds me of my grandmother…
    thank you for the amazing work on this topic,
    this is Jingle,
    Have a nice day!

  25. its really, really painful.

  26. it is very sad and dark… but everything written in the poem has its universal truth…. 🙂

  27. heart shattering. Beautiful

  28. This is a beautiful piece. Thanks for stopping by my blog. Poetry is never something I’ve really done so I appreciate the words of encouragement.

  29. You capture a moment most folks dare not to think about…a good poem.

  30. Eeek! /thumbs up!

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